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Alexander Ruiz

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I am currently going through another round of grammar corrections. And thank you for catching the Troy/ Samantha chapters. I must have accidentally moved them, but it was intended to end with Samantha's chapter. I have fixed that now. Thanks again!

Dina aka Agrona

Wow, where to start? First, I applaud you for such a brilliant story idea. I immediately knew that this is one of those stories you can't "put down".

I'm very impressed that you are able to keep track of all these stories and all these characters.Your plot is well crafted and your setting is very unique.

I even recommended your story to a friend, who never even heard of Tablo, but who loves a good story.

The only issues I've found are with the last two chapters. I believe that Samantha's chapter (2nd to last) is the climax of the story and wraps up the book. I was a bit thrown, when I turned the page and we returned to an earlier point in the story with Troy. For me, Samantha is the main protagonist and as a reader I'm more vested in her than anyone else. My suggestion is (and it is just that, since it's your story), to move the Troy chapter before the Samantha chapter and let her conclude the book.

Other than that, there were just some minor spelling/grammar issues, like "he wondered the hallway" - should be "wandered"...

Brilliant story! Time travel stories are always confusing, but you managed to keep it all straight and I easily followed your story!

Alexander Ruiz

Thank you Megan! I appreciate that. I photoshopped the cover combining a series of images. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

Megan Fatheree

Two things: 1. Great story thus far. Just finished Chapter 1. #2. Where did you get your cover? It is amazing!




For my mom.

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Em·py·re·an : n
  1. The highest reaches of heaven, believed by the ancients to be a realm of pure fire or light.
  2. The abode of God and the angels; paradise.




“To die, to sleep - 
To sleep, perchance to dream - ay, there's the rub,
For in this sleep of death what dreams may come...” 
- William Shakespeare

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Prelude: Samantha

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